Assignment #15- Final Reflection

Referring back to my very first wall post i only took the class because my adviser recommanded it to me to improve my writing skills. then when I reread my seventh wall post I was becoming a better writer and noticing my problems in writing and doing something about them. I feel I'm close to achieve my goal as becoming a better writer.I wanted to achieve my goal as becoming a good writer. I also feel I have a long ways to go before I can call myself a good writer. know I would change my goal because out of everything I learn I know at the end of the day I'm not finish with writing. if I keep at it I would probable be able to write a whole paper without help. My strength is my reason/ideas I come up with to support my topic. my weakness is my conclusion and my thesis. I need to work on them a little more.

Assignment #14- Planning for Revisions

      I am going to rewrite the very last paper we wrote. the one when we the class had a chance to pick our own topic and write about it. the topic I pick is called "by going to college are you guaranteed the lifestyle you see in movies. My 3 strength is the reason/ideas I used in my paper. My conclusion I think I did a great job on, since I'm not very in ending a paper. my last strength is the way compare the topic to my personal experience. My 3 weakness is first I need to clarify/specific my topic question. secondly I need to work on my thesis a little more. make my thesis more clear so when someone read it they know right off the top that, that's my thesis. last I need to tell why my ideas/reason relate to my thesis.

assignment #13

I analysis this online article about "should college athletes students get paid". That a good topic and can easy be sum up in a few page.  I notice a lot of things she forgot to mention. She told both side of the argument. she told what why most people feel like college athlete shouldn't get paid and why people feel they should get paid but not once did she mention how she felt. she never picked a side to argument for or against. When i start writing my paper I am going to start off like she did by telling the affect part but then twist it up and put with side I agree with and details falling my opinion. She also didn't give details or hint to with side she agree with, she just kept on writing. she ended the paper by saying both side have good arguments. When writing my paper I will make sure I state my argument and conclude my paper with good reasons why you should come to my side of the argument.

assignment #12

• Topic: is going to college as stressful as everyone make it seems?
• Thesis: college is as stressful as everyone make it seem because its a whole different ball game than high school was and new environment.
• compelling argument: I say college is stressful because everything so different than high school. you have to worry about work, financial aid, grades, attendance, books, money, 5-10 page papers,research projects, new environment, loans, life getting real and not even saying the things you have to do at home and/or work. This is compelling because it have most things college students have to worry about, things they stress over or should be stressing about.
• weak argument: That its important you go to college because its hard to get a good paying job without college and make something better of your self. This is weak because i am considering or mentioning the other side of the argument. when i mention this i can also put out there that it cost a fortunate to go to college and if your don't spend your time wisely it would be a waste of your time and money.

assignment #11

       Looking at my first 2 graded assignments in this class I see a free errors that keep repeating in my papers. One error I keep making is not using spell check when I get done writing my papers.sometimes it slip my mind and that i re read so many time I feel like I caught all my errors. The second error I make is I don't not write in complete sentences most of the time. I write a lot of fragment and don't catch them because at the time they sound so right, like they belong their. Another error I make is get off the subject. I can be writing about animals then by the end of the paper in on an whole different subject. I turn any paper very personal. I give a million personal examples and stories about how the subject relates to me or someone I know. I am not saying personal experience isn't good. Last but not least I seem to always make this error no matter what I'm writing about. I never can write an correct thesis. No matter what the topic is or how much information I look up writing an thesis statement I very challenging to me.
       Their are ways to avoid/solve these problem. I can use spell check more offend or get a few people besides my professor and peer to read over my paper a few times. Stop being in a rush or waiting later to do my paper. Theirs not to many way to avoid fragments but practices writing in complete sentences. To avoid get off topic i can outlet my reading or research with the main topics that should and should not be in my writing paper. I also can practice writing a thesis and just focus on writing an thesis before even writing my paper. these error affect my writing because it messes up my paper. the paper don't make as much since as it should. it may also bored or confuse the readers.

#assignment 10

I think the peer review process is okay. I like that our peer give their feed back on our papers. Tell us what's missing or should be add. Giving their opinion on how to make the paper better and spell checking it. I think the peer review process can be improve. It's the same questions with the same people. I don't know exactly what but we need a change. The strength of having a peer review is that two opinions is better than one. The weak part of peer review is that some paper do not always need other opinions to be good. My ideal peer review is having someone read over your paper and telling me my grammar mistakes. I do think peer review is best in the early. You can catch the mistakes and problems early on then write the whole paper then having to change half the paper. Larger groups are better because their are so many opinions to conisder. We have a whole class period which should be well enough time unless it's a 10 page paper.

#assignment 9 (free topic)

what I enjoyed most in my college experience are the students and the improvement. I made a few friends here and they seem very cool and act like they in college instead of high school. I also like college because the though of every time I come to school its just helping me in my future. The more I come the closer I am to my success. I get really happy when I pass a test or do something right because if I can do it in college I can do it anywhere. Now don't think I'm saying I love school which puts me on what I like least about college. I hate the papers we have to write. I knew we was going to have to write paper about 4 pages long but I didn't know that we was go have them all at the same time. I had three 4 page papers due earlier this week image my fun filled week. I don't think the teachers realize we have 4+ classes to keep up with. we get assignments and homework out of them classes to. I also don't like how serious this school is. I know college is a serious matter but everyone seem so stressed out and tired, like they just lost their best friend. Theirs not to many fun activity on campus for younger students. even though I'm not a big fan of college I know this what I have to do to get somewhere and make it in life so why not try to make the best of it..

Assignment #8

I picked to write about "Free speech off campus must be prtected" and before reading the article I totally agree. I said if you can't write or say what's on your mind off school grown or on your own personal page you can't do it no where. After reading the article I was totally against it. That was just something people shouldn't took lightly. People get mad when kids write on they page about killing or hurting someone and blame Facebook and others for not reporting it but also get made when you do report them. I choose this topic because in today's society theirs always a story in the newspapers on the news about children threading to kill themselves or someone else and putting it on Facebook.Tatro being a college student should of known better to put what she put on Facebook. She and her friend might have though it was funny but I'm happy someone reported it. I am happy because we don't know if she was joking or being honest about it. People need to learn not to put certain things on public website.

AssIgnment #7

As we get close to our midterm I can honestly say that I learned how to write a literacy narative for the first time and I also can say I have so much more to learn about writing.I learn to take my peers comments and put it toward making my paper better. I also learn how to edit someone else paper and leave comments on how they can improve their paper.Looking back at my very first post I do think I'm making a progress but a slow one.I do find this class helpful because It has me always thinking and helping me analyzing things.If I could change anything I would like to be able to pick a topic that's about something happening in today's society or pick my own topic.I wouldn't say my writing changed in a major way but I did improve my grammar mistake. I am able to catch some of mine and can easy catch someone else's mistake. I still have a couple of weeks left to go so I still have time to improve my writing skills and plan to. Their no sence in hiding when I am going to always have to write paper while in college.

        The ad I picked is target to young people that's are old enough to get in clubs and buy drinks. The purpose is to make it seem like drinking is cool and less complicated than a having a girlfriend and the tone is fun, excited and free. This ad is different than their other Jim beam ad but also similar in like a fun way. Most of these ad have young people having fun or at a party.
          However; the purpose of my literacy narrative is to get across to people that I always had a major problem in writing and though I can go on without it. My audience is my classroom peers and professor. I think the tone in my essay was sad and hatred but at the end my tone was excited.

Analyzing an Advertisement

   

• Purpose: By using young men, Jim beam and bold letters this ad is basely saying that alcohol is more easy to cope with than a girlfriend.
• Audience: I'm going to say the target audience our 21+ males. Basely males that's old enough to drink and go to clubs. The young men appear to be at a club holding shots or cups of alcohol makes it very clear that they have to be 21 or older.
• Genre: Most of Jim Bean ads look fun, exciting, and making it seem cool to be drinking Jim bean. This ad unlike the rest have a picture of people partying and drinking. Most of the other have surfers, wordy, a great deal of young woman in short shorts on the beach and etc. These ads make it seem like drinking is cool and leave you with no worries. Yes this is what I would expect for this ad, drinking may not be cool in some eyes but they do have to sell it.
• Tone: Fun filled, exited and encouraging/pressuring.

Revision

There weren’t that many differences from my first draft and final draft. I am happy with my final draft. I think I did a great job and put a lot of effort to my final draft. I did made varies mistake in my first draft that I had to correct in my final draft. I also had to go in more details with my paper, make it more personal. In my final draft I ready found or showed my feelings towards writing. I had some grammar mistake, sentence fragments and run on sentences but not any major changes. Yes I do believe I am able to find my own mistake but not every one of them. I think it’s better to have someone keep peer reviewing my essay because they can help me find my mistakes and give opinions on how to make my paper better. I learned a lot from having my peer review my papers. I learned that my conclusion wasn’t very understandable. Now if I did have my peer review my paper and tell me that I would have kept my conclusion the way it is. I learn that others opinions are good and they can maybe catch stuff I didn’t catch. As I said I think peer review is better than checking it yourself because what sound good to you may not make sense to others. The strongest part of my essay is my introduction. I started with my feelings toward writing and in my past how I always struggled with writing. The weakest part of my essay was my conclusion and vocabulary. My peer said I needed to add a little more to my conclusion, a few more sentences to make it solid.   

What makes A good paper?

         what makes a good paper good is the time and effort you put toward your paper. Think and brainstorm on the topic instead of just writing from the top of your head. Revise and rewrite play a big part in making your paper good. Even editors and publishers have to rewrite some of their greatest papers like a hundred time before they are good.
           As soon as you read a paper you can tell if it's a passing paper or not. When you read the paper just ask yourself a few question like what's the point of this paper? W ho is the paper about and who is expected to read it? Is it clear and interesting? Is the introduction and conclusion and is it opening and closing the main argument? What are their reason/example to support their main arguments? When you can find this in a paper than that's a good paper.

assignment #2

      I have three great topics to pick from for my literacy narrative assignment. With "Something I would change about myself" being my first choice. I pick this topic because it took me a while to right this paper the right way. I wrote this paper my first year of college and I wrote it over and over and over again because I wrote it any kind of way and about anything. I kept saying I do not want to change nothing about myself but my teacher had me really sit down a think deep and hard about.

     
       My second choice was this paper I wrote last semester about domestic violence's. This topic always got me to thinking. I did a lot of research on the topic and found out a lot of information and things I didn't know. This paper was a little easy because I wrote papers about this topic before but so much change in society every year. This paper also made me a little upset to know that people will go so low as to hitting on beat on someone just to make themselves feel in-control.              
 
   
  My last choice was also in my senior year of high. The beginning of my senior year we all had to write a personal statement to send to colleges we plan to attend. this also was a paper I had to rewrite a few time before my teacher gave me the thumbs up. I though the paper was about telling the school I planed to attend why they should let me attend their school nothing less and nothing more. I had to really get personal.