Assignment #14- Planning for Revisions

      I am going to rewrite the very last paper we wrote. the one when we the class had a chance to pick our own topic and write about it. the topic I pick is called "by going to college are you guaranteed the lifestyle you see in movies. My 3 strength is the reason/ideas I used in my paper. My conclusion I think I did a great job on, since I'm not very in ending a paper. my last strength is the way compare the topic to my personal experience. My 3 weakness is first I need to clarify/specific my topic question. secondly I need to work on my thesis a little more. make my thesis more clear so when someone read it they know right off the top that, that's my thesis. last I need to tell why my ideas/reason relate to my thesis.