Revision

There weren’t that many differences from my first draft and final draft. I am happy with my final draft. I think I did a great job and put a lot of effort to my final draft. I did made varies mistake in my first draft that I had to correct in my final draft. I also had to go in more details with my paper, make it more personal. In my final draft I ready found or showed my feelings towards writing. I had some grammar mistake, sentence fragments and run on sentences but not any major changes. Yes I do believe I am able to find my own mistake but not every one of them. I think it’s better to have someone keep peer reviewing my essay because they can help me find my mistakes and give opinions on how to make my paper better. I learned a lot from having my peer review my papers. I learned that my conclusion wasn’t very understandable. Now if I did have my peer review my paper and tell me that I would have kept my conclusion the way it is. I learn that others opinions are good and they can maybe catch stuff I didn’t catch. As I said I think peer review is better than checking it yourself because what sound good to you may not make sense to others. The strongest part of my essay is my introduction. I started with my feelings toward writing and in my past how I always struggled with writing. The weakest part of my essay was my conclusion and vocabulary. My peer said I needed to add a little more to my conclusion, a few more sentences to make it solid.